Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. The essay written on this Issue prompt takes the position that rather than hindering our abilities to think for themselves, technology will spur humanity on to achieve ever-greater things.
Below is an outline of how the author expresses her thesis throughout the essay:. The next area a perfect-scoring Issue essay must demonstrate mastery of is the development of its position through compelling and persuasive examples and reasoning. The author of this essay accomplishes this task by providing examples to support each idea she discusses and, furthermore, explaining not only the content of the examples but also why the examples support her position.
By increasing our reliance on technology, impossible goals can now be achieved. Consider how the late 20th century witnessed the complete elimination of smallpox. This disease had ravaged the human race since prehistorical days, and yet with the technology of vaccines, free thinking humans dared to imagine a world free of smallpox. Using technology, battle plans were drawn out, and smallpox was systematically targeted and eradicated. In this example, the author begins by laying out the main idea to be discussed impossible things can be achieved by relying more on technology.
She then supports this idea with the example of the impossible problem of smallpox and the steps taken that led to its eradication. The great thing about the way the author explains her reasoning and examples is the concision and precision with which she gets her information across. This kind of precise writing takes practice, but being able to effectively sum up an example and why it supports your position in just a couple of sentences is essential if you want to get a high score on the GRE Issue essay.
Focus, organization, and logical connections are the third criterion that a perfect-scoring essay needs to fulfill. In the case of this GRE essay sample, the author achieves this organization and focus by linking ideas both within paragraphs as seen in the previous example as well as between paragraphs. The unlikely marriage of economics and medicine has healed tense, hyperinflation environments from South America to Eastern Europe. This last example provides the most hope in how technology actually provides hope to the future of humanity.
By keeping paragraphs tightly linked on both the surface level of sentence structures as well as on the deeper level of content being discussed , the author of this essay also keeps her writing focused and cohesive. Want to improve your GRE score by 7 points? We have the industry's leading GRE prep program. Built by world-class instructors with 99th percentile GRE scores , the program learns your strengths and weaknesses through machine learning data science, then customizes your prep program to you so you get the most effective prep possible.
The last quality a perfect-scoring essay must demonstrate is precision of language and flow in writing. The author of this GRE Analytical Writing sample fulfills this requirement by using language to precisely and economically convey meaning throughout her essay. Return to Table of Contents.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The sample Issue essay written in response to this topic takes the stance that cooperation, not competition, is a preferable value to instill in young people in preparation for government. You can read the full essay on page of this PDF. Read on for a discussion of the different ways in which this essay meets the requirements for a perfect score.
The author fulfills the first part of the criteria with his clear statement of his thesis in the last line of the very first paragraph:.
I would have to agree that the best way to prepare young people for leadership roles is to instill in them a sense of cooperation. Getting to be President of the United States or the managing director of a corporation might require you to win some battles, but once you are there you will need diplomacy and people-skills.
Those can be difficult to learn, but if you do not have them, you are likely to be a short-lived leader. The author of this essay accomplishes this second part by choosing a two-pronged approach to answering the essay question. Rather than merely explaining how cooperativeness leads to positive outcomes in government, industry, and other fields, the author also explains how competitiveness leads to negative outcomes.
Thus, the author makes his position clear by stating it in the opening and closing paragraphs of the essay and shows insight by taking the more complex position that not only is cooperation good, but competition is bad.
A great example of this development can be found in the second paragraph of this essay, which discusses the drawbacks of competition. Beginning with general reasoning about human behaviors at school and the office to introduce his point, the author then neatly segues into specific examples of competitiveness gone amok Hitler in Germany and the recent economic meltdown in America.
With each example presented in the essay, the author pushes his position along a little further. This final example allows the author to reach his final destination in his discussion of competitiveness: The third way this essay meets the requirements of a perfect-scoring essay is through the logical connection of ideas within and between paragraphs. The transition between the end of paragraph two and the beginning of paragraph three provides a stellar example of this skillful connecting of ideas:.
It [competitiveness] served him well in some respects, but it also proved to be detrimental and ultimately quite destructive. Leaders who value cooperation, on the other ahnd, have historically been less prone to these overreaching, destructive tendencies. While this kind of transition would be good enough for a lower-scoring essay, though, the author does not just leave the connection between the two paragraphs at that. Instead, he also connects the two paragraphs by keeping the focus on the same issue from the end of one paragraph to the beginning of the next.
The final 6-level quality demonstrated by this GRE Writing sample is its use of skillful and precise language to convey specific meaning. Overall, the language in this essay is formal and academic , despite the profligate use of first person point of view by the author which can make writing seem less formal.
The recent economic meltdown was caused in no large part by the leaders of American banks and financial institutions who were obsessed with competing for the almighty dollar.
Compare the above excerpt to a more milquetoast version of the same statement:. The recent economic downturn was mostly caused by financial leaders who wanted to earn lots of money. Check out our best-in-class online GRE prep program. We guarantee your money back if you don't improve your GRE score by 7 points or more. PrepScholar GRE is entirely online, and it customizes your prep program to your strengths and weaknesses.
We also feature 2, practice questions , official practice tests, hours of interactive lessons, and 1-on-1 scoring and feedback on your AWA essays. This second sentence has the same basic meaning as the real excerpt from the essay. In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports swimming, boating and fishing among their favorite recreational activities.
The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities.
In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to increase. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The full text of this essay can be found on the ETS website. Be sure to read through the essay first before coming back to read my analysis of it. Cleaning the pollution in the river will get rid of the odor and then lead to more usage by residents. Though there have been complaints, we do not know if there have been numerous complaints from a wide range of people, or perhaps from one or two individuals who made numerous complaints.
The author identifies the assumption that complaints indicate many people want to use the river and examines it by reasoning through possible scenarios other than the one presented in the prompt.
The next way the author of this sample GRE essay fulfills the requirements of a perfect-scoring Argument essay is by providing comprehensive support for each of her main points. Throughout the essay, the author is able to explain exactly why each assumption made is problematic by using examples that precisely illustrate her argument.
Consider how this is approached in the second paragraph of the essay. For example, the survey could have asked residents if they prefer using the river for water sports or would like to see a hydroelectric dam built, which may have swayed residents toward river sports. The sample may not have been representative of city residents, asking only those residents who live upon the river.
The survey may have been 10 pages long, with 2 questions dedicated to river sports. We just do not know. Another important ideal a perfect-scoring Argument essay must live up to is being organized logically, with clear transitions between ideas. The author of this GRE essay sample is able to meet the first part of this requirement with a simple five-paragraph organizational structure: Accomplishing the logical connection and development of ideas throughout the essay requires a little bit more finesse, but the author still manages it.
Additionally, the author implies that residents do not use the river for swimming, boating, and fishing, despite their professed interest, because the water is polluted and smelly. The combination of these two methods of connecting the two paragraphs results in a smooth logical flow from one idea to the next.
Lastly, a perfect-scoring Argument essay must be precise and effective in its discussion of ideas, with few if any errors. The author of this essay successfully meets this standard by using purposeful language to efficiently and clearly get her point across, as can be seen in this example from paragraph three:. The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. Ideas are logically sequenced.
Most transitions reflect the writer's logic and are usually integrated into the essay. The introduction and conclusion are effective, clear, and well developed. The essay shows a good command of language. Sentences are varied and word choice is varied and precise. There are few, if any, errors to distract the reader. The essay takes a position on the issue and may offer a broad context for discussion.
Development of ideas is specific and logical. Most ideas are elaborated, with clear movement between general statements and specific reasons, examples, and details. Focus on the specific issue in the prompt is maintained. The organization of the essay is clear, although it may be predictable. Ideas are logically sequenced, although simple and obvious transitions may be used. The introduction and conclusion are clear and generally well developed.
Sentences are somewhat varied and word choice is sometimes varied and precise. There may be a few errors, but they are rarely distracting. The essay shows an understanding of the task. The essay takes a position on the issue and may offer some context for discussion. The essay may show some recognition of complexity by providing some response to counterarguments to the writer's position.
Development of ideas is adequate, with some movement between general statements and specific reasons, examples, and details. Focus on the specific issue in the prompt is maintained throughout most of the essay. The organization of the essay is apparent but predictable. Some evidence of logical sequencing of ideas is apparent, although most transitions are simple and obvious.
The introduction and conclusion are clear and somewhat developed. Language is adequate, with some sentence variety and appropriate word choice. There may be some distracting errors, but they do not impede understanding. The essay shows some understanding of the task. The essay takes a position on the issue but does not offer a context for discussion. The essay may acknowledge a counterargument to the writer's position, but its development is brief or unclear. Development of ideas is limited and may be repetitious, with little, if any, movement between general statements and specific reasons, examples, and details.
Focus on the general topic is maintained, but focus on the specific issue in the prompt may not be maintained. The organization of the essay is simple. Ideas are logically grouped within parts of the essay, but there is little or no evidence of logical sequencing of ideas.
Transitions, if used, are simple and obvious. An introduction and conclusion are clearly discernible but underdeveloped. Language shows a basic control. Sentences show a little variety and word choice is appropriate. Errors may be distracting and may occasionally impede understanding. The essay shows a weak understanding of the task. The essay may not take a position on the issue, or the essay may take a position but fail to convey reasons to support that position, or the essay may take a position but fail to maintain a stance.
There is little or no recognition of a counterargument to the writer's position. The essay is thinly developed. If examples are given, they are general and may not be clearly relevant. The essay may include extensive repetition of the writer's ideas or of ideas in the prompt. There is some indication of an organizational structure, and some logical grouping of ideas within parts of the essay is apparent.
Transitions, if used, are simple and obvious, and they may be inappropriate or misleading. An introduction and conclusion are discernible but minimal.
Sentence structure and word choice are usually simple. Errors may be frequently distracting and may sometimes impede understanding. The essay shows little or no understanding of the task. If the essay takes a position, it fails to convey reasons to support that position. The essay is minimally developed. The essay may include excessive repetition of the writer's ideas or of ideas in the prompt. Focus on the general topic is usually maintained, but focus on the specific issue in the prompt may not be maintained.
There is little or no evidence of an organizational structure or of the logical grouping of ideas. Transitions are rarely used.
Score of indicates that the essay substantively weak or does not adequately meet college level writing standards. Score of indicates that the writing contains some acceptable qualities, but it still misses qualities reflective of sound college level composition.
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MSOT Admission Onsite Essay Rubric & Scoresheet Score 4 Performance Standard Description Undeveloped Skill 2 Emerging Skill 3 Excellent Clarity & Precision Expands on ideas; provides examples Sufficient detail without fluff. Superficial and/or random ideas. No examples. Score = 3. Essays within this score range demonstrate some developing skill in responding to the task. The essay shows some understanding of the task. The essay takes a position on the issue but does not offer a context for discussion. The essay may acknowledge a counterargument to the writer's position, but its development is brief or unclear.
Score sheet for your essay contest score sheet jan. which will be completed manrrs cover sheet, blog, and all the contest. Sponsored by the essays shall be judged on the. It is the student submission. • Total score refers to the Essay, Special Circumstances, Extracurricular Activities, Letters of Recommendations and Scholarship (National Test Scores + GPS) added together to end in a score .